jin27 your essay itself is pretty decent. your intro sets things up well with the prompt, you've picked texts that fit. you hit some good points about liesel's book stealing and the accordion's meaning. but that line about her intentions being "parallel to the nazi regime" might confuse the marker more than enlighten them, so maybe rephrase that. for unorthodox, you're spot on with the non-linear structure and the wig scene. but, calling "it was the most beautiful thing i've ever heard" a hyperbole is likely a misstep, it just sounds like genuine awe, not an exaggeration for effect. you're hitting the main analytical points, which is fine for marks, but some of your deeper analysis and specific device identifications could be sharpened up.
for that reflection, you gotta play the game. this isn't just about what you wrote, it's about performing your learning journey. you need to discuss the "process" of writing it, what "challenges" you supposedly faced, how your "understanding evolved" while wrestling with the prompt, and what profound "insights" you "gained" about storytelling. talk about specific moments where you had an "oh my!" moment. basically, convince the marker you had some sort of intellectual awakening during this whole essay-writing ordeal. im in year 11 too, and honestly, reflections often feel like you're just putting on a show, but that's how you get those big marks.
