Hey, I just read your piece And it is very very good, good job on the idea
I love the concept of it And your language is wonderful. Howver when you go back And talk to the 'letter' or the other person or your friend , it can get a bit confusing for the reader, make it more clear who you're talking to/ where you are, maybe use some imagery . you can cut down on words there. also I'm arab so I understand the idea of the letters at each paragraph more, if another person was reading it, it wouldn't make sense. the idea is rlly good but execution needs to e better. maybe give some context from before about the letter, eg ' I lay on our old coach in () And stare at my lined paper over And over again alef ba ta, repeating the alpha bet until my dad is happy with me' or smth like that establish what it is.
overall good job And good luck on cutting down its the worst yr 12 I had to go from 1800 to 1300 its truly sucks
hope this helped