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clover

Honestly I'm just worried about my narrative. The idea itself seems unique, but I'm 99% sure it was one of the most common ideas used.

    [deleted] same for me... i wrote about like the main character in first person like getting their own theatre and like they find a locket under like a floorboard or something from their great grandmother...

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      well, sadly i am that one of the not too many people

      [deleted] do you feel like it helped? the only thing for me was like the time management and pressure to do it within the time limit

        I forgot that in the narrative the theatre was empty, i wrote one in the full theatre

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          clover

          Nah, not really. I did the tests today off pure ability ngl. I'm a bit of a sweat so JAC didn't assist me at all.

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            I don't think that's a big fuss. The markers are usually lenient.

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              PotatoSinghThe3rd same i wrote about whispers except t was a guy watching ghostbusters and some other sht but yeah i tried to make it rlly emotive and evocative

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              ikr, I honestly a little mad as i was literally cramming thousands of formulas, parabolas, quadratic equation and stuff and NOTHING like that even came up!!

                Hopefully macrob accepts high averages because I’m not getting anymore than that 😭

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                thats a big relief, i am just happy i managed to finish it in time

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                I heard lots of my friends talking down JAC and Hendersons. they go to some tutor called Select Entry Accelerator.
                they claimed that all the JAC content is outdated asf, and the contents on the exam werent gonna be close to it. turns out they were right

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                the persuasive though! i didnt know if you were meant to talk about the people (Sam and someone else?) in the essay... i just said "Do people go to the cinemas as much as they used to?" and I said it wasn't...

                  What was everyone's stance for persuasive?
                  mine was yes, cinemas are good

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                    clover

                    i wrote in first person about a lab experiment monster coming alive and massacring everybody around the girl. i didnt have much time so i just did a cliffhanger and filled with a shit ton of imagery. now that i look back at it half of it didn't make sense. eg "his eyes were jet-black: devoid of compassion"

                      clover uhm u really fd up there bc u had to choose who’s side u were on and state why

                        [deleted] i feel like if you have a lot of description that's really good because like imo i didn't focus too much on describing sadly

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                          I wrote against. My reasons were:

                          1. As we embark into a new digital age, streaming services become more readily available
                          2. The expenses of movie cinemas in contrast to its alternatives is far greater

                          Rebuttal: "Movie cinemas provide many benefits and luxuries"
                          I wrote about how this motion is correct but does not negate the fact that these luxuries are present when streaming movies

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                            I wrote that tentacles erupted from the screen (nobody else except for the person can see it) and swallowed the person whole and transported her into a jet black place where all the walls started closing in and that person started suffocating, i was running out of time so then i just wrote that she got sucked out of the place and back into the cinema and wondered if it was all just a hallucination, after that i ended in a cliff hanger..

                            Ronaldo yea i get where you're coming from. let me explain what i did - i said people don't go to the cinema for various reasons - a) because there's other options b) because it's expensive, then the rebuttal stated that cinemas are more immersive, but there's other options like VR and stuff. i didnt explicitly state whose side i was on but i implied it. i hope i didnt mess it up 😭

                            Ronaldo its not a persuasive piece if you state "i agree with nova" that's a analytical, persuasive pieces NEVER use personal pronouns, you are meant to just write a persuasive piece on which side of the story you support, bc you can say something like "I prefer novas idea". So i think clover is fine

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                              clover

                              My jac teacher says my imagery is too much and too hard to understand 🙁

                                [deleted] I wrote for cinemas were bad and my reasons were
                                1- The expense issue for the average customer
                                2- the inconvenience of location, prices and comfort ability
                                3- why no people decide to attend cinemas
                                Rebuttal- cinemas can abolish the average customers budget
                                It was better wording than what I just said

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                                  [deleted] really? my teachers always told me to "add more description and examples" even though i had one for every paragraph

                                    [deleted] i wrote against as well:
                                    I wrote about the ever prevalent cost of living issues that envelop our society, thus it wouldn't be sage to keep spending so much on movie tickets, and also i took upon a more personal tone by addressing and stating things like, "Wouldn't you want to be able to stream movies in the coziness of your own home" (not the exact words but similar idea pretty much), then i rebutted saying that for our youth, its wise to take them out for a occasional cinema trip so that they don't just die out and they are able to make more memories kinda.

                                      Ronaldo wait how is that a rebuttal, thats literally a statement for. Abolish a budget just supports your first argument

                                        MMHS i actually did something quite similar, like in the comfort of your own home and stuff

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                                          clover

                                          I probably overdid my descriptions. Like I'd have a whole ass paragraph about my character's emotions. And then it'd be really rushed towards the end when I'm wrapping it up

                                            MMHS nah so my rebut all started as some may state that cinemas have high quality screening etc but when it came to the however part I wrote that but my actual rebuttal is high quality tv

                                            [deleted] i tried doing like super descriptive this one time, didnt even get upto the plot twist in the 20 minutes...

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                                              What the sigma, me too. I talked about the cost of living issues and I used pathos like, "As the cost of living crisis further takes a toll on our lifestyles, it has become clear that many families cannot afford this luxury"

                                                clover
                                                I wrote that cinemas are good

                                                1. provide stress relief from academic pressure
                                                2. great way of entertaining and making fun-loving memories
                                                3. rebuttal:- some may argue that research shows that in 2021 not many people came to the cinema
                                                  I then stated that it was because of pandemic and health issues and further the evidence shows that there was a quick come back after 2021
                                                  Something like that...
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                                                  clover

                                                  I end all my narrative essays with a cliffhanger. I think in all my time at JAC I've only ended a narrative without a cliffhanger once. And that was because the prompt was some obscure topic

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                                                  I'm probably not a good person to judge your work but wouldn't your first motion be neglecting of streaming services? Couldn't students stream movies in the comfort of their own homes - which would provide more stress relief from academic pressure?

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                                                    ye ig but when i had already written my whole introduction was when i realised that i should have gone against, but obv i didn't cut it because 1 time 2 neatness 3 space for writing
                                                    so yeah, i needed to bear with the stance that i chose.....

                                                    i went super overboard with the persuasive and stuffed up my narrative writing time 😅

                                                    :): yeah bc from 2019 onwards their was an increase in the aspect of expense and versatility obviously due to our growing "technologically based" era

                                                    [deleted] same here, like using pathos for that and i used it for the comfort of your own home, sort of like a appeal to audience