At13 honestly other people have pretty much said what i'm going to say already, but there is a bit too much dialogue. the description is quite nice as well but the ending doesn't really make sense. dont get me wrong its an interesting scene but i have absolutely no idea what is going on or how this is happening, you should give it a bit more backstory. also u ended with the classic "it was all a dream" which is so trite, you should try to end your story with a resolution, pretty sure you'll get marked down for such an abrupt ending (cliffhangers are fine but just make sure it flows nicely)
