Ronaldo Is it a persuasive? If it is, then first off you should use paragraph starters like I said before, like 'First of all', or 'To begin with', or 'Moreover', or 'Furthermore. The introduction doesn't need any, however the conclusion does. Conclusion (last paragraph) should sum up everything, every reason/argument and should begin with 'In conclusion', or 'To conclude', or 'To sum up'
So yeah that is what I noticed first I'll read it when I finish eating
