chxin crazy good story, for 10 minutes thats unbelievable work. a few pointers i do have though:
- some of the vocab feels a bit out of place, like it doesn't really make sense how a colour (cerulean) could make you feel apprehensive, maybe elaborate a bit more on that
- its a bit frenetic, like all these random things keep happening to the character without any explanation and its all happening super fast (one moment the guy is opening the bag then he gets dragged into atlantis then they see a random house then he falls into another abyss then he's about to fight a behemoth?)
- some small grammar errors (the abyss was not empty, it was a choice - doesn't really make sense)
honestly though for 10 minutes this is phenomenal, for those 3 things i could list 100 more good things, way better than anything i could write ngl
