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Positives:
well-organized with a clear structure
strong argument.
ideas are well-developed with solid evidence
addresses financial, educational, and environmental concerns
Negatives:
Improve transitions for smoother flow.
Consider exploring counterarguments more to strengthen your points.
Refine awkward phrasings for clarity.
Enhance vocabulary for a more compelling argument.
ERRORS:
Error: it will limit the amount of people who can learn to their full potential
Impact: The incorrect use of 'amount' instead of 'number' can confuse readers about the countability of the noun.
Error: This would lower the amount of talented students who will not be able to work in prestigious positions
Impact: The incorrect use of 'amount' instead of 'number' can confuse readers about the countability of the noun.
Error: This shows digital devices should not replace traditional textbooks.
Impact: The abrupt transition can confuse readers about the comparison focus.
Error: The term 'one-time users' is unclear; specifying 'single-use practices' clarifies the environmental concern.
Suggestions:
Review the rules for countable and uncountable nouns to avoid common grammatical errors.
Practice restructuring sentences to improve clarity and coherence.
Use precise language to ensure your arguments are clearly understood.
Read your work aloud to identify awkward phrasing and improve sentence flow.
FINAL RATING : 7.75/10
