a📀 its a pretty nice piece, your structure is great and your reasons flow well and make good sense. however, your vocab is a bit basic (e.g. when referring to financial status would've been nice to use some words like fiscal, exorbitant, etc), and you repeat a lot of words (u used "this" almost 10 times, and u could've replaced "digital" with "electronic" or simply omitted it in some cases). overall tho pretty good work, if u can write this in 20 min on the day that would be great, imo top 10/20
