MMHS he is took you and tryingformhs advice and i created a new essay i didnt write two bps but i tried to make it better and i did it in around 15 mins and if you could can you rate it

Electric vehicles, one of the most Revolutionary ways of using electricity and studying it ever since the great work of Nikola Tesla. Electric cars are one of the tools that can save our earth. This is due to the fact that carbon emissions from petrol cars have gotten worse.
The Electric car can come in all shapes and sizes. The differences between an electric car and petrol car is wider but here is a few. Electric Cars are more suitable for the earth as they are environmentally friendly to us and our planet, but all these petrol cars are deteriorating our planet by releasing carbon emissions and polluting our planet. The electric vehicle runs on a battery that is powered all buy electricity and while petrol cars may seem as a great alternative due to them being seen as having “great mileage “and not being as the men with toxic masculinity name it “feminine”.
The petrol cars are very famous and here are a few. The Toyota is not so much on the environmentally friendly side as they are a top distributor of Petrol-powered vehicles and while they may seem harmless the more petrol Toyotas the more harm our planet is being dealt with. The Lamborghini, Ferrari and sport car industry is one of the most hated distributors of vehicles because they release the most carbon emissions out of them all. The super car industry has a sprinkle of Electric vehicles, however when it comes to branding, they are the masculine brand as they aren’t Girls by making electric vehicles. Tesla one of the most successful car federations is loved by those who care for our environment and those who have a more meticulous taste when it comes to our vehicles.
Some may state that the reason they don’t feel the urge to buy an electric powered vehicle is because they’ve decided it is too expensive, However that is not the case, due to tesla being the worlds largest electric car brand it makes it seem like this revolutionary vehicle is worth too much however if you see Asian brands such as Toyota, Mazda and many more you will see that all of these brands have electric vehicles for under $70,000 dollars. The misconception of people having electric cars are snobby and hateful to those who are poor are wrong the actual case is these people are flamboyant and have a taste in them that allows them to buy vehicles that support our planet with a vast amount of style as they can come in any shape, size, and colour.

I’ve always believed electric cars can help lower gas emissions and save our planet. Since the planet could work on using more electric vehicles I fight the urge to recommend any petrol cars and as I grew the more mature, I came to realising that my stance on electric vehicles is correct, I urge you all to start driving electric cars and I believe we can do that, and we can do that now!

    Ronaldo Good structure, however in your intro do sign-posting (state your arguments) and all of your arguments are still leading to carbon emmisions except for the last one so try make them lead to different arguments
    Also begin your bp's with paragraphs starters such as "To begin with" or "First of all" or Additionally like your last one. With the conclusion begin it with "In conclusion" or "To conclude" or "To sum up"

    Ronaldo Like maybe 75-80% but try to fix your mistakes (watch yt vids about how to improve)

    AverageMultiChoiceTest i believe its the acer method where you get marked on a scale but if you really want to know search acer scoring method

    AverageMultiChoiceTest they mark your tests and basically rank you amongst everyone else taking the test. so basically if you get 20/60 but everyone else gets 9/60 you get a superior lol
    Edit: they rank you using: superior, high average, above average, average, below average

      Ronaldo Like try not to use too much 'I's only use it if the topic is asking you about your opinion. And make it like its an essay, not like you're saying it to someone

      Ronaldo
      I dont think you should worry bc you seem already good at writing, perhaps practice what your most weak at.

        Ronaldo
        Ok, vocabulary is good but as I said, dont labour the point because you need to choose the right words for the sentence, because sometime 'precise' could work better in the flow of a sentence than 'meticulous'.

        MMHS Ye like rn im focussing on Nr and Vr and a bit of Math because I'm dumb compared to you in Math even though I get A+'s

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          Ronaldo
          also the whole feminine and masculinity thing is unnecessary for me, only choose things that add meaning to your piece. That is what i do for my English essays, because if you have a technique that is evident like onomatopoeia or smth, don't mention that bc its a technique but choose the ones that add value to your piece

            TryingForMHS
            Idk if im that good compared to you? Do you have any other practice tests that i could do to perhaps help each other on things you find hard to do under time constraint?

              MMHS I only find the deroza ones challenging the rest are easy, because once you sent those and I found it challenging and the rest of you guys said it was easy and got like 55/60 while i got like 51/60 I got nervous

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