• Year 7-10
  • 2024 Yr 8's hoping to get in a selective school

TryingforSCHS yeah solid 7-8/10, gotta say there are many good things to take out of this, first of all, nice intro where you weaved your arguments in a sophisticated way, nice choice of vocab, not too over the top as this can be overriding, strong arguments although try not to be too repetitive, and nice conclusion. So, first of all, try not to give evidence or anecdotal quotes unless you are 100% sure about them, also, try to extent the rebuttal a bit as it is a bit bland and not even with the length of your other arguments, also, i mean you could use some better words for example "which begs the questions", you could say engenders the question which basically means to make something come up (like the thought of it in this context). Overall great effort, with more tweaking this should be aa or sup

    got 52/60 for the vr better education ones with a 25 min time limit, could've gotten like another 5 questions right

    • sui replied to this.

      AverageMultiChoiceTest Ahh please don't use the pen with a rubber, the erasable one
      The pen ink disappears in heat/through friction.. if left in a hot place like under the sun or heater, the work will disappear

      Even if it's unlikely that it will be affected, you never know where the tests will go and if everything disappears it'd be terrible
      Also, another hot place where the pen will disappear is in a photocopier, so if they decide to put it in one, everything gone

      yeah bc the pen is water based and the scanner wont pick up the ink

      thank you so much for remidning me of that, I would have failed the entire test without that info

      • Tas likes this.

      MMHS i was nt trying to say it lie that i thought poignant meant nice or smthand collacation is js a technique to use its not a high vocab word

      • MMHS replied to this.

        mhs-grinder
        i mean an antonym of poignant is nice and happy hahah. Ohhhh, i thought you said colloquial man I'm blind. Mb, but yeah good feeback.

          MMHS all good man, anyways ill kep it in mind ab the voab, not too overdo ig but i dont usually use that much it was only this one that i posted on the forum i hv others as well

          MMHS bro i found a way to add poignnt into my school assigment lol. I needed to use good words since it was a poem hehe

          for a poem thats a good word, especially if ur writing about smth melancholy

          TryingforSCHS Your writing is really good however make sure not to use you or we because you'll get marks off. persuasive should always be formal meaning no slangs, contractions (don't must be do not, coudn't must be could not) and it has to be third person too. for creative you can do first person.