TryingforSCHS yeah solid 7-8/10, gotta say there are many good things to take out of this, first of all, nice intro where you weaved your arguments in a sophisticated way, nice choice of vocab, not too over the top as this can be overriding, strong arguments although try not to be too repetitive, and nice conclusion. So, first of all, try not to give evidence or anecdotal quotes unless you are 100% sure about them, also, try to extent the rebuttal a bit as it is a bit bland and not even with the length of your other arguments, also, i mean you could use some better words for example "which begs the questions", you could say engenders the question which basically means to make something come up (like the thought of it in this context). Overall great effort, with more tweaking this should be aa or sup
