heeduo4life its quite short with your arguments and rebuttal also for the amount it took to write in it isnt the best bc for a persuasive piece in the sehs exam(if u r doing it) takes 20 mins. overall solid 6-7 out of 10 work on ur grammar, structure and length of the piece.
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heeduo4life that is a 9/10 if it is a discussion piece. However, if it is persuasive, it should be focused on one viewpoint. Since i think a persuasive prompt is more common, my advice is for a persuasive essay.
For the last paragraph, try formatting it like this:
1-contention- your viewpoint on the topic
2-summary of arguments- try not to make it too mechanic, use more.. flow-y(?) words
3-interesting ending- maybe a final suggestion, or something funny
EXAMPLE
Conclusively, working remotely is the obvious answer, no matter your situation. It will ensure a more peaceful and calm working environment, a much more positive work-life balance and it will also benefit the environment. Anyways, would you really prefer to wake up early to go to work or sleep in and work in your pyjamas?
DISCLAIMER: this isn't the best advice in the world, but it is what I would do, and I consider writing as my best skill for the SEHS exam
ANOTHER NOTE: the reason i gave it a 9 was because of your use of grammar and punctuations to make the text cohesive, in addition to the extensive vocab u used
heeduo4life for the last paragraph make it link back to all ur arguments and clearly state ur contention
heeduo4life so, you have two rebutted arguments??? Doesnt make sense because now ur whole viewpoint is just gone out of the window
Tas i was trying to see from each perspective so i guess you can say it's a discussion piece. idk i'm kinda confused myself cause it's my first essay
YOUR FIRST ESSAY???? WHAT? The test is this Saturday and you haven't ever done an essay. If this is the case then you have really really left this too late. Not to sound too pessimistic but there is not really much to do bc if you dedicate all your time to just writing then your other subject with fall behind so idk
MMHS i thought it was persuasive and narrative and I'm fairly good at those so i didn;t know it was an essay until saturday
heeduo4life there is loads of things to work on, things that can't be accomplished in the matter of 3 days which is why u never leave anything to the last minute. Last week should be mainly for revising, not learning anything new.
heeduo4life i dont think you have really researched or put any time at all into learning or researching, we will be writing a creative and a persuasive, not an essay
heeduo4life isnt it persuasive and narrative though?
and i thought an essay was when u analyse a book and write...
I think you shouldn't be worried as long as u get this:
Persuasive- pick 1 side of the topic and write about it. dont switch sides. e.g if the prompt is everyone should learn how to cook, you pick yes or no.
Discussion- Write arguments for both sides and stay neutral.
Creative- Write a narrative or story or something were u use ur imagination.
And, if there is just a prompt that doesn't say what type of piece to write, look for key words that could hint which type of piece to write.
i dont think the examiners will give you an ambiguous prompt, obviously they will tell you which ones is persuasive
Tas Thank you so much.
this may sound weird but do you guys know any type of pen i should use for the writing component of the test. Like what brand??
heeduo4life no worries (:
This may sound a very weird and out of box question but when you are revising your persuasive and creative texts and see a mistake then how would you correct it because after cutting it you wont have any space to write it again. I normally make a small arrow and write on top of the cutted words but i dont know if the AI would be able to understand it. Maybe it can even mark it as a spelling mistake..
So, how do you all edit your text while revising?