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Ronaldo yea i get where you're coming from. let me explain what i did - i said people don't go to the cinema for various reasons - a) because there's other options b) because it's expensive, then the rebuttal stated that cinemas are more immersive, but there's other options like VR and stuff. i didnt explicitly state whose side i was on but i implied it. i hope i didnt mess it up

Ronaldo its not a persuasive piece if you state "i agree with nova" that's a analytical, persuasive pieces NEVER use personal pronouns, you are meant to just write a persuasive piece on which side of the story you support, bc you can say something like "I prefer novas idea". So i think clover is fine

clover

My jac teacher says my imagery is too much and too hard to understand

MMHS Oh phew, thank goodness

[deleted] I wrote for cinemas were bad and my reasons were
1- The expense issue for the average customer
2- the inconvenience of location, prices and comfort ability
3- why no people decide to attend cinemas
Rebuttal- cinemas can abolish the average customers budget
It was better wording than what I just said

[deleted] really? my teachers always told me to "add more description and examples" even though i had one for every paragraph

[deleted] i wrote against as well:
I wrote about the ever prevalent cost of living issues that envelop our society, thus it wouldn't be sage to keep spending so much on movie tickets, and also i took upon a more personal tone by addressing and stating things like, "Wouldn't you want to be able to stream movies in the coziness of your own home" (not the exact words but similar idea pretty much), then i rebutted saying that for our youth, its wise to take them out for a occasional cinema trip so that they don't just die out and they are able to make more memories kinda.

Ronaldo wait how is that a rebuttal, thats literally a statement for. Abolish a budget just supports your first argument

MMHS i actually did something quite similar, like in the comfort of your own home and stuff

clover

I probably overdid my descriptions. Like I'd have a whole ass paragraph about my character's emotions. And then it'd be really rushed towards the end when I'm wrapping it up

[deleted] i tried doing like super descriptive this one time, didnt even get upto the plot twist in the 20 minutes...

MMHS

What the sigma, me too. I talked about the cost of living issues and I used pathos like, "As the cost of living crisis further takes a toll on our lifestyles, it has become clear that many families cannot afford this luxury"

clover
I wrote that cinemas are good

1. provide stress relief from academic pressure
2. great way of entertaining and making fun-loving memories
3. rebuttal:- some may argue that research shows that in 2021 not many people came to the cinema
   I then stated that it was because of pandemic and health issues and further the evidence shows that there was a quick come back after 2021
   Something like that...

clover

I end all my narrative essays with a cliffhanger. I think in all my time at JAC I've only ended a narrative without a cliffhanger once. And that was because the prompt was some obscure topic

:):

I'm probably not a good person to judge your work but wouldn't your first motion be neglecting of streaming services? Couldn't students stream movies in the comfort of their own homes - which would provide more stress relief from academic pressure?

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ye ig but when i had already written my whole introduction was when i realised that i should have gone against, but obv i didn't cut it because 1 time 2 neatness 3 space for writing
so yeah, i needed to bear with the stance that i chose.....

i went super overboard with the persuasive and stuffed up my narrative writing time

:): yeah bc from 2019 onwards their was an increase in the aspect of expense and versatility obviously due to our growing "technologically based" era

[deleted] same here, like using pathos for that and i used it for the comfort of your own home, sort of like a appeal to audience