MHS successful candidate The cow, flaunting a corpulent guise, started to smile. It soon bore a grin fraught with despair. Utter doom. As if portending something bad would happen. The brooding cobalt sky flashed a scintillating white before the I realised what the cow meant.

A barrage of lightning rained down on the farm, the tumultuous roar of thunder reverberating throughout the cold, misty atmosphere. I looked behind me, at the cow, or rather, the charred, disfigured monstrosity that was once it. Not so impervious after all. Knowing I would meet the same fate if I tarried any longer, I took off, dodging strikes of lightning simultaneously. As I sprinted, I caught a glimpse of lush, verdant forest in the corner of my eye, and I soon figured I could only survive with the protection from those trees. So I scampered a bit faster, before a scream pierced my eardrum. My heart sank.

I had left my dog behind.

      mhsbandar My eyes were a rhythm of up and down fluctuations, searching for the emaciated dog. Suddenly, I felt a forceful push against my spine. I fell face-flat on the rutted floor. My nose ached from intolerable pain caused by the sudden impact. I gasped as I found myself a victim of the unsettling lightning. What shocked me wasn't that I was right under a lightning bolt, but the thing that pushed me to it. I realised than that I didn't leave my dog behind, but that the dog left me behind...

        MHS successful candidate no its actually pretty good, u have an extensive vocab which is really helpful, and the suspense u build will be helpful in the exam. but the thing is some of the vocab u use does not make sense in the context, like the sentence "My eyes were a rhythm of up and down fluctuations" could be proofread and changed to "My eyes scanned my surroundings franctically" or something similar. U should practise writing narratives in 20 minutes on paper, just search for a prompt, start a timer and then write, and when you're done or the time is up review it, proofread it, see where u made mistakes and take note of them for next time

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